P4

Feedback - What changes were made:

After reviewing the feedback it allowed me to edit my script into creating correct format. Something I missed on in my first draft was having no use of a character introduction or description of this character, without this the reader wouldn't have a understanding of the characters dialogue and actions and why they may be performed by this character; but having added it, it makes the reader have a much clearer understanding of a character before reading their actions and dialogue.

Another format error I made was not including a action line after using a slug line for when a new scene is created and it's location. Without the use of this transitioning to a new location can seem confusing to the reader as for there is no given knowledge of the new scene's location or where the characters are placed and doing. Adding this allowed me to be creative when creating a new location and making certain aspects of the location connect with the character and bring a broader side to the characters personality.